My Autobiography
My name is Ana Lucia. I’m 20 years old. I have studied
at Sophianum school for 11 years. I love dance. When I have time, I dance in
the academic “Freestyle”. Also I like go
shopping with my friends. I have been studying for 2 years at ICPNA. When I was
18 I decided study there because I think that this second language will help me
in all scope like maybe give me more opportunities in working life. Now I study
at Unife University. My major is education for children. Also I’m looking for
academies in others country because I want to learn more about my career. The
next vacation I will travel to Argentina Because I will attend a conference on
early stimulation and I am very excited. I have traveled to Piura a lot of
times because one part of my family live there. I got used to waking up early
when I entered to the university. I used to go out with my friends all the
Saturdays but always I have to do a lot of work for the university. I will
visit Brazil because all my cousins are there and I want to know them and spend
time with them. In 3 weeks, I’ll be traveling at USA because I will pass the
summer vacation there with my mom, my dad and my brother in that country.
A situation that has turned out differently from what you expected.
When I was 12 years and I was studing at Sophianum
school. In the olimpics games of the school there was a competition about do choreography
with tricks of gymnastic. We were the smallest of all the competition and we
thought we were going to lose.
Competition began, we present our choreography and our
coach told us that the choreo we had went very well. When jury said the results
we felt very nervous but we won the competition and we were very proud.
The most important invention of the last 200 years
I would like to talk about advantages and
disadvantages of having a tablet. I consider the tablet are a good inventions
because you can connect to the internet in a very practical way.The tablets
have many applications and we can have fun using it. Also you can read your
mails very easy and quickly. The tablet has Wi-Fi connectivity and has USB
ports for better communication between the user and the device. The battery has
much more length. You can read books in a virtual way and you can see
applications very easily because the screen is so big.
Also the tablet has disadvantage. The touch screen no
provides a confortable keyboard. It’s insecure to do take out your tablet in
the street because someone can steal it.
And you can distract you when you're doing something very important. Also
becomes a vice and makes you antisocial. By using that device you don't have
good habits like going to the library to read a book.
I'm going
to talk about the case of Ciro Castillo. For many months we have heard a lot
about the case of Ciro, but it still have not been solved all the questions
that people have about the case. Now I want to talk a little about the process
of this whole case.
In early
April, Ciro Castillo Rojo and Rosario Ponce López love to go in search of
adventure but they got lost in the Colca Valley in Arequipa, during a hike. They
were last seen on March 31 by a miner. She was found on April 13, but her
partner does not. Thus, the search began in the mountains, which ended on
October 16: the young student was found dead by a group of lifeguards.
Many people
said that Rosario could have been the killer because the police found images in
places where it was impossible to reach. Maybe she must have had a discussion
and pushed him by the mountain. He may have been drugged and fell down the
mountain or someone could have killed and then he could have thrown.’
The remains
of Ciro Castillo were buried in a cemetery in Huachipa on October 28. The police
have continued to search for the cause of his death.
Ana your life is so exited you study a lot also you know everything about waht you want to study this is important, in my opinion education is a good career because i am a teacher too and my students are amazing i thing you can feel the same and travel is the best way to learn i wish you can be a good teacher
ResponderEliminarabout your situation i think you have to belive in you this is the most importan also i think that in a contest everythink can happen so what you have to do is rexal a think you want to win
about you invention i think the ipad is a good invention i don´t have one but my cousin has, i used it once an it was amazing but the same i think you have to be careful and don´t be addicted
ana i find those mistakes , i think ponctuations porblen check it don´t use the for example the next year is bad, just next year, about ypur second writing check it don´t think in spanish, about the third is the tablet is a good invention, use comas
ResponderEliminarAna Lucia, see that you have organized your ideas well but you have to be careful when using infinite and gerunds. I also saw some mistakes when using the present perfect and past perfect. You have to be careful with that because the person who is reading can understand something completely different. Also when using "the". You only use "the" when you are talking about something specific and when you are talking about tablets you used "the" careful with that.
ResponderEliminarAbout the first composition you have to use more commas also you have mistakes about infinitives. Ohhh and you used other which Is plural with country which is singular.
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