My biography
My name is Jorge Cavero ,i´m 16 years old . I was borned in march 19th in 1997 . When i was a child i used to lived in barrios altos with my mother but now i live with my father in la Marina and also two years ago i had lived in chiclayo for one year because my grandpa used to lived there and he was really sick. Well when i was going to enter to high school my father decided that i should go to another school because he though that the other school wasn´t enough for enter to a good university for that i have been in trilce school for five years , in my opinion it is a great school because it helps me a lot to enter to the catolica university but also i was in pamer academy the last three months for that period of time i wasn´t studying at icpna but in this month i am studying again because i need to finished as soon as possible .
well , in my opinion there should be an equilibrium in both cases because for example if the parents don´t pay too much attention to their children they will think that their parents don´t want to take care of them and they will grown up with a lot of resentment . For example my friend Gianfranco he never sees his father except when he goes to his home to leave some money to her mon so when someone ask him how is his father he answers i don´t known and i don´t care , one tie he told me that he hates his father and i asked him why and he answered that he hates him because he cheated on his mother .But i think that he hates him because his father never pays attention to him because my father also cheated on my mother and i don´t hate him because i know that he loves me and he takes care of me . And i think that the children should pay attention to their parents because your parents are never going to do someting bad in fornt of you for that your parents are the best examples that you can have.
About the second composition There are missing words Im going to talk about three serious points:
ResponderEliminarThere are very little periods
Some misspelled words
There are missing words
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ResponderEliminarI think it's okay, only in some cases you have written some words in disorder like "bad in fornt of you", and the correct word is bad in FRONT of you.
ResponderEliminarOn the other hand you have written,"one tie" and the correct word is one day. Just that. Good job Jorge.